Talk:The Fimbria controversies (Nova Roma)
Author's Note
I know it is not customary to sign one's Wiki articles. I had originally done so here. Someday, when this one has been fleshed out, passed the NPOV test, and been linked to all appropriate persons and decrees, it will no longer require my signature or anyone else's; it will by then be the result of a community effort, as any good Wiki page should be.
In the meantime, however, someone created a link to this page without creating the page itself. The requirement is there. I would rather someone else wrote the thing...but it has to be written, and so far I seem to be the only taker. As long as this is the case, this article will, for me, by nature of its subject matter if nothing else, remain personal--intensely so. Hence the byline. I've since removed it; but I wanted the community to know my reasoning.
I used double pronouns ("his/her", e.g.) in the first part of the article, dropping them for the masculine once Marius realises who and what he really is. I'd be happier to eliminate them entirely, but thought I'd err on the side of diplomacy. If I've gone too far (or not far enough) in the desired direction, please advise and I'll make them consistent throughout.
- There is another way: re-write to eliminate the pronouns. I've done that for much of the first paragraph and I hope it reads well and it does avoid the assignment of gender to the subject. That will perhaps permit the reader to focus on the issues, not the gender. Agricola 08:21, 9 August 2007 (CEST)
- I like it! But it was a little harder to do in that second paragraph (gratias ago for paragraphing it, btw), so I just made the pronouns consistent there. (I only had two left to change.) You're right, the clumsy "s/he" construction only draws attention to the very thing Lucius Marius was trying to minimise.
- I changed your iuno link; the corresponding article is about the goddess and her aspects, whereas the iuno as a woman's tutelary spirit is mentioned in the article for genius. I've also moved the last sentence of the second paragraph to be the first sentence of the third; this was done in order to highlight the contrast between Marius' and the leadership's interpretation of his request. -- Marius Peregrinus 07:19, 10 August 2007 (CEST)
As to attributing thoughts, feelings and motivations to the subject, while such attribution is not normally deemed desirable, in this case I believe it to be critical to understanding the issue. It is very true that no Wiki writer should try to guess what was going on in the mind of his subject. It is also true that if, as I believe, it must be done here...as the subject himself, I am the only one who can do it. Again, if the Nova Roma Wiki community thinks this is a bad idea, it can be corrected; but someone else will have to do the correcting then...I'm afraid I don't have it in me to be that professional about it.
Hopefully the final version will be comprehensive, extensively documented, footnoted and linked, contain many more voices than my own and many more perspectives. It is not necessary that it be sympathetic to Fimbria unless that is what the community has come to agree about the incident.
- I hope you don't mind, but I jumped ahead to the end. Also, I added headings using our year templates. I strongly urge this approach as being neutral and avoiding the issue of topical headings. I have a notion that the excellent APA link would be better as a reference footnote. This is because the off-wiki links always have that distracting arrow icon and I would like to see ALL of them moved to References sections. Agricola 06:51, 11 August 2007 (CEST)
I have a feeling this is going to be a project in itself, and it may not all fit on one page. Meanwhile, we can at least keep this Discussion page humming...! >({|:-) -- Marius Peregrinus 07:41, 4 August 2007 (CEST)
